Sunday, October 6, 2013

He Said, She Said and a Backward Twist

Written for:  Verse First  and  Poetry Jam
Linking to:   dVerse Open Link Night #117



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He said it didn't matter if he was there or here
As she was entrenched inside his soul whether far or near

She said even though she understood the spiritual concept
Earthly limits play a part in her feeling quite inept

He said he heard her every word, felt her love and care
Their souls were tightly intertwined, bonds unbreakable and rare

She said she didn't understand why they journey so apart
Although his thoughts do bring her peace they also break her heart

He said that when her time was up he would be waiting on that side
She said the purpose of her life she first had to abide.

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She said the purpose of her life she first had to abide
He said that when her time was up he would be waiting on that side

Although his thoughts do bring her peace they also break her heart
She said she didn't understand why they journey so apart

Their souls were tightly intertwined, bonds unbreakable and rare
He said he heard her every word, felt her love and care

Earthly limits play a part in her feeling quite inept
She said even though she understood the spiritual concept

As she was entrenched inside his soul whether far or near
He said it didn't matter if he was there or here.

~x~


Verse First prompt
Poet and short story writer Grace Paley said, "It is the responsibility of writers to listen to gossip and pass it on. It is the way all storytellers learn about life."
Natalie Goldberg expounded on this idea by saying, "We should learn to talk, not with judgment, greed or envy, but with compassion, wonder and amazement."
Today you have some options. Write about gossip. Write about what happens when wagging tongues do harm. Or not. Write a poem of conversation. Or write about the growth potential when interactions are based on compassion, wonder and amazement. You choose.

Poetry Jam
Write a short poem, 12 lines or less, and then read it backward, from the bottom up. The lines aren't backward, just the order of the lines. Rewrite the poem backward, with the last line first and the first line last: a palindrome poem.


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20 comments:

  1. A nice poem,this palindrom.First time I am reading one such.Thanks

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    1. First time I've done one too KParthasarathi. Thanks for visiting my blog.

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  2. This has such a deep emotional feelings. Brought tears in my eyes.

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    1. Thanks Vandana. Yes, this poem is close to my heart.

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  3. I think the echo and theme give it an ethereal feel. Enjoyed it, Suzy!

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    1. Thanks Laurie. Glad you liked it. I enjoyed both prompts and was quite surprised how it turned out.

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  4. Interesting indeed. Maybe I should venture one too

    PhenoMenon
    http://throodalookingglass.com/2013/10/raindrops-2/

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    1. Do try it Pheno - maybe a haiku palindrome?

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  5. You did a great job with the palindrome ... this is so lovely, emotive and spiritual :)

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    1. Thanks Loredana. Glad you liked it and got the spiritual aspect of my poem.

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  6. really lovely and full of emotion and sensitivity. Excellent how you worked this.

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  7. How completely you illustrate the challenges of relationship, Suzy; and you manage this within the form. Nicely done.

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    1. Thanks Kim. It was an interesting form to experiment with.

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  8. A depthful and heartfelt write. I have always liked the idea of 'abiding,' and your poem really increased my appreciation and liking. I enjoyed the way you were able to write to both prompts so astutely. It is always nice to see you in both places! Smiles.

    (Sorry about the first removal...I had made errors & wanted to correct.)

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    1. Thanks Mary, This one is close to my heart. Glad you liked it.

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    2. smiles...def a cool write....its heart warming to hear he will be waiting on her when she is ready and that she is willing to admit as well what she needs to work on to get to the point...and i hope that same kinda commitment plays out as they go forward....

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    3. Thanks Brian. She sincerely hopes he'll be waiting there. And yes, one must fulfil life's purpose.

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  9. A very cool mirror palindrome. I thought it was very satisfying and enjoyed it very much. Thank you!

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    1. Thanks Beachanny. Glad you enjoyed my poem. The palindrome poem was an interesting poetry form.

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