Sunday, October 27, 2013

I Cried Out

Written for:  Verse First    Poetry Jam    G-Man    WoW
Also linking to:  Poetry Pantry #164        dVerse Open Link Night #111

Verse First - I cried out
Write in the first person. Avoid cliches; eschew the ordinary. Surprise, inspire, educate, elucidate. That's it. 

Wow - Fun with Repetition
your entry has to have one sentence that is repeated at least thrice in your post. You cannot repeat the sentence consecutively.


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Why are you so elusive
I cried out, my beloved Lord
My soul it cannot truly live
Without your love and accord

I cannot find you anywhere
I cried out, my beloved Lord
My soul is weary with many a tear
My heart desolate and gored

Please hear my prayer 
I cried out, my beloved Lord
For you are my life, and breath and air
For aeons you I have adored

Let me hear your sweet flute
I cried out, my beloved Lord
For that's my guiding star, the route
That makes my spirit soar.

~x~



Poetry Jam - Vision  and  G-Man -Friday Flash 55

The vision of You
Is a sight to behold
A beautiful blue
And a halo of gold

I sat in awe
As she described You to me
My soul did soar
You set my spirit free

A moment Divine
Is now etched in my soul
I long for another sign
And your vision to hold.

~x~


This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda. We give out themes for creative writing each weekend for Indian bloggers.

Update 30/10/2013 - My post was selected as a WoW post




 

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49 comments:

  1. Beautiful poems to describe your search. Thank you for visiting and your kind words. They mean a lot to me.

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    1. Thanks Aspiritofsimplicity. Glad you thought so. Was my pleasure to visit your post.

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  2. both poems elevate a notch higher from this mundane life....

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    1. Thanks Sumana. Ultimately that is the aim of our souls - to elevate. My belief anyway. Thanks for dropping by.

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  3. Both poems are very spiritual. The first is like a Psalm. The second is an answer to a prayer. Nicely coupled together.

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    1. Thanks Loredana. I try keep the prompts separate but link up the poems. Yes, you understood my poems well - the spirituality, the coupling and the answer to my prayer.

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  4. I liked both poems, Suzy. Yes, both very spiritual. First poem: Sometimes I wonder too just where the Lord is when I pray. Some days HE seems so far away. And in the second poem: What a wonderful vision this must have been!!!

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    1. Thanks Mary. Yes, sometimes I think the Lord is lost in His world. and yes, the vision was astounding - only it was described to me in a reading I had. Now I long to see with my own eyes.

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  5. Both of them are really very good poems.

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  6. So heart wrenching prayers, lord will definitely listen:)

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    1. Thanks Vandana. I wait in faith every moment of every day.

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  7. I like both of these. I especially like the rhythm and repeated line in the first one and what a lovely vision in the second. A spiritual search is an elusive thing indeed. thanks for posting this!

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    1. Thanks Peggy. I keep searching in faith. That vision was amazing. I sat astounded, but elated.

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  8. Lovely writing, Suzy, and I love that the crying out, in the first, is to God. The joy of the vision in the second poem is very clear.

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    1. Thanks Sherry. These just came to me (yet again), perhaps I was meant to share the Divine vision. I cry out a lot to my beloved Lord in the hope that someday I'll see that vision again, first hand this time.

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  9. We all go through times when God seems absent, Suzy and you've captured that so well here. The beauty is He's always around!

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    1. Thanks Corinne. So true, He's there all the time. It's just that we don't see.

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  10. what a reassurance such a vision might be...and oft when we can not see god it is that they are that much closer you know....

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    1. Hi Brian. It is very reassuring. I like your view that we can't see Him because he is that much closer. Now that's even more reassuring. Thanks. :)

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  11. So nice to also see you in Poetry Pantry today, Suzy!!!!

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    1. Thanks Mary. I missed the last one - the linky had closed when I got to it :( but I made it this time :)

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    1. Thanks Lisa. Glad you liked them.

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  13. You have captured your religious experience very well in these poems.

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    1. Thanks Kerry. I think I'm more spiritual than religious. But glad you thought so.

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  14. The Lord is always there, even when we don't feel him. The first poem reminds me of 'Footprints in the Sand". Sometime the Lord is carrying us and we don't realize it. I know this has happened to me.
    And what an awesome vision in your second poem. It reminds me of Mary, in blue with her halo.

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    1. Thanks LadyCat. It's nice that He carries us in our hard times. I guess at the back of my mind I know that. Yes, the vision was awesome. An amazing experience. I feel so blessed.

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  15. Lovely words Suzy. It is after all HE who takes care of us. Sometimes hidden , yet very much there. :)

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  16. I sat in awe
    As she described You to me

    ... we learn of God through so many ways - being inspired by someone else, having a friendly place to go and share one's journey, is a rare gift.

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    1. Thanks Margaret. The beautiful and Divine vision came during a reading done by a friend for me. We both sat completely astounded. Yes I am glad I have my friend who is an amazing person and her guidance is always beneficial.

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  17. Both are such earnest prayers. He is around us and with us though sometimes it may appear otherwise...

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    1. Thanks Shilpa. He sure is but sometimes we just want that proof.

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  18. I like them both - the cry and the vision. And I think we all cry out at some point in our lives, and the visions are more common than we know - we just don't look for them. Good writing.

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    1. Thanks Myrna. Either we just don't look or we look too hard! Glad you liked them both.

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  19. In the first poem the desire and plea and in second the awe and glee both r amazingly described :)
    Good ones

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    1. Thanks Afshan and you created a rhyme too :)

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  20. Lovely poems Suzy ... The search which starts with you and ends at you ...beautifully put ..amazing

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    1. Thanks Shiva. I am in constant search of my Lord and eventually He obliges.

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    2. Thanks for visiting my blog. Greatly appreciated.

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  21. Lovely and simple words that convey ample meaning :) I guess all of us are in search of that very elusive faith :) congrats on the wow!

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    1. Thanks Preethi. True a lot of us are on that spiritual quest. thanks for dropping by.

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  22. Wow, these are so beautiful, Suzy. These can be recited as prayers. You glorify God through your talent. ♡ :-)

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    1. Thanks Irene for your lovely comment. Oh my I am lost for words. But glad you liked my poems.

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  23. beautiful expressions, Suzy.
    Life sure draws a blank sheet over us and we ask for guidance since lost.

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    1. Thanks Ruchira. Yes sometimes the way is hidden and then there's only Him we can turn to.

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  24. That's beautiful..simply lovely!

    :)

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    1. Thanks Ankita. Glad you liked it and thanks for visiting my blog.

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