Sunday, October 27, 2013

I Cried Out

Written for:  Verse First    Poetry Jam    G-Man    WoW
Also linking to:  Poetry Pantry #164        dVerse Open Link Night #111

 Verse First - I cried out
Write in the first person. Avoid cliches; eschew the ordinary. Surprise, inspire, educate, elucidate. That's it. 

 Wow - Fun with Repetition
your entry has to have one sentence that is repeated at least thrice in your post. You cannot repeat the sentence consecutively.
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Why are you so elusive
I cried out, my beloved Lord
My soul it cannot truly live
Without your love and accord

I cannot find you anywhere
I cried out, my beloved Lord
My soul is weary with many a tear
My heart desolate and gored

Please hear my prayer 
I cried out, my beloved Lord
For you are my life, and breath and air
For aeons you I have adored

Let me hear your sweet flute
I cried out, my beloved Lord
For that's my guiding star, the route
That makes my spirit soar.

~x~



Poetry Jam - Vision  and  G-Man -Friday Flash 55

The vision of You
Is a sight to behold
A beautiful blue
And a halo of gold

I sat in awe
As she described You to me
My soul did soar
You set my spirit free

A moment Divine
Is now etched in my soul
I long for another sign
And your vision to hold.

~x~


This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda. We give out themes for creative writing each weekend for Indian bloggers.

 Update 30/10/2013 - My post was selected as a WoW post


 

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48 comments:

  1. aspiritofsimplicityAugust 25, 2013 at 12:08 AM

    Beautiful poems to describe your search. Thank you for visiting and your kind words. They mean a lot to me.

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    1. SuzyAugust 25, 2013 at 12:49 PM

      Thanks Aspiritofsimplicity. Glad you thought so. Was my pleasure to visit your post.

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  2. Sumana RoyAugust 25, 2013 at 12:56 AM


    both poems elevate a notch higher from this mundane life....

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    1. SuzyAugust 25, 2013 at 12:54 PM

      Thanks Sumana. Ultimately that is the aim of our souls - to elevate. My belief anyway. Thanks for dropping by.

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  3. MaryAugust 25, 2013 at 1:54 AM

    I liked both poems, Suzy. Yes, both very spiritual. First poem: Sometimes I wonder too just where the Lord is when I pray. Some days HE seems so far away. And in the second poem: What a wonderful vision this must have been!!!

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    1. SuzyAugust 25, 2013 at 1:02 PM

      Thanks Mary. Yes, sometimes I think the Lord is lost in His world. and yes, the vision was astounding - only it was described to me in a reading I had. Now I long to see with my own eyes.

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  4. JANUAugust 25, 2013 at 2:11 AM

    Both of them are really very good poems.

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  5. Vandana SharmaAugust 25, 2013 at 4:50 AM

    So heart wrenching prayers, lord will definitely listen:)

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    1. SuzyAugust 25, 2013 at 1:03 PM

      Thanks Vandana. I wait in faith every moment of every day.

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  6. PeggyAugust 25, 2013 at 5:14 AM

    I like both of these. I especially like the rhythm and repeated line in the first one and what a lovely vision in the second. A spiritual search is an elusive thing indeed. thanks for posting this!

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    1. SuzyAugust 25, 2013 at 1:05 PM

      Thanks Peggy. I keep searching in faith. That vision was amazing. I sat astounded, but elated.

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  7. Sherry Blue SkyAugust 25, 2013 at 5:31 AM

    Lovely writing, Suzy, and I love that the crying out, in the first, is to God. The joy of the vision in the second poem is very clear.

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    1. SuzyAugust 25, 2013 at 1:06 PM

      Thanks Sherry. These just came to me (yet again), perhaps I was meant to share the Divine vision. I cry out a lot to my beloved Lord in the hope that someday I'll see that vision again, first hand this time.

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  8. SuzyAugust 25, 2013 at 1:00 PM

    Thanks Loredana. I try keep the prompts separate but link up the poems. Yes, you understood my poems well - the spirituality, the coupling and the answer to my prayer.

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  9. Corinne RodriguesAugust 25, 2013 at 11:12 PM

    We all go through times when God seems absent, Suzy and you've captured that so well here. The beauty is He's always around!

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    1. SuzyAugust 26, 2013 at 8:04 PM

      Thanks Corinne. So true, He's there all the time. It's just that we don't see.

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  10. Brian MillerAugust 26, 2013 at 12:12 AM

    what a reassurance such a vision might be...and oft when we can not see god it is that they are that much closer you know....

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    1. SuzyAugust 26, 2013 at 8:05 PM

      Hi Brian. It is very reassuring. I like your view that we can't see Him because he is that much closer. Now that's even more reassuring. Thanks. :)

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  11. MaryAugust 26, 2013 at 12:26 AM

    So nice to also see you in Poetry Pantry today, Suzy!!!!

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    1. SuzyAugust 26, 2013 at 8:06 PM

      Thanks Mary. I missed the last one - the linky had closed when I got to it :( but I made it this time :)

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  12. Lisa A. WilliamsAugust 26, 2013 at 1:00 AM

    Love these poems Suzy!

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  13. Kerry O'ConnorAugust 26, 2013 at 1:18 AM

    You have captured your religious experience very well in these poems.

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    1. SuzyAugust 26, 2013 at 8:07 PM

      Thanks Kerry. I think I'm more spiritual than religious. But glad you thought so.

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  14. AnonymousAugust 26, 2013 at 7:42 AM

    The Lord is always there, even when we don't feel him. The first poem reminds me of 'Footprints in the Sand". Sometime the Lord is carrying us and we don't realize it. I know this has happened to me.
    And what an awesome vision in your second poem. It reminds me of Mary, in blue with her halo.

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    1. SuzyAugust 26, 2013 at 8:09 PM

      Thanks LadyCat. It's nice that He carries us in our hard times. I guess at the back of my mind I know that. Yes, the vision was awesome. An amazing experience. I feel so blessed.

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  15. AnonymousAugust 27, 2013 at 2:36 AM

    Lovely words Suzy. It is after all HE who takes care of us. Sometimes hidden , yet very much there. :)

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  16. MargaretAugust 27, 2013 at 5:31 AM

    I sat in awe
    As she described You to me

    ... we learn of God through so many ways - being inspired by someone else, having a friendly place to go and share one's journey, is a rare gift.

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    1. SuzyAugust 27, 2013 at 7:51 PM

      Thanks Margaret. The beautiful and Divine vision came during a reading done by a friend for me. We both sat completely astounded. Yes I am glad I have my friend who is an amazing person and her guidance is always beneficial.

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  17. Shilpa GargAugust 28, 2013 at 2:27 AM

    Both are such earnest prayers. He is around us and with us though sometimes it may appear otherwise...

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    1. SuzyAugust 28, 2013 at 8:27 PM

      Thanks Shilpa. He sure is but sometimes we just want that proof.

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  18. Myrna R.August 29, 2013 at 3:52 AM

    I like them both - the cry and the vision. And I think we all cry out at some point in our lives, and the visions are more common than we know - we just don't look for them. Good writing.

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    1. SuzyAugust 29, 2013 at 11:50 PM

      Thanks Myrna. Either we just don't look or we look too hard! Glad you liked them both.

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  19. Afshan ShaikAugust 30, 2013 at 4:22 PM

    In the first poem the desire and plea and in second the awe and glee both r amazingly described :)
    Good ones

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    1. SuzyAugust 30, 2013 at 7:12 PM

      Thanks Afshan and you created a rhyme too :)

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  20. ShivaSeptember 9, 2013 at 9:34 PM

    Lovely poems Suzy ... The search which starts with you and ends at you ...beautifully put ..amazing

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    1. SuzySeptember 11, 2013 at 11:42 PM

      Thanks Shiva. I am in constant search of my Lord and eventually He obliges.

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    2. SuzySeptember 11, 2013 at 11:43 PM

      Thanks for visiting my blog. Greatly appreciated.

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  21. preethiOctober 30, 2013 at 6:58 PM

    Lovely and simple words that convey ample meaning :) I guess all of us are in search of that very elusive faith :) congrats on the wow!

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    1. SuzyOctober 30, 2013 at 8:09 PM

      Thanks Preethi. True a lot of us are on that spiritual quest. thanks for dropping by.

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  22. IreneOctober 30, 2013 at 7:19 PM

    Wow, these are so beautiful, Suzy. These can be recited as prayers. You glorify God through your talent. ♡ :-)

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    1. SuzyOctober 30, 2013 at 8:16 PM

      Thanks Irene for your lovely comment. Oh my I am lost for words. But glad you liked my poems.

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  23. Ruchira KhannaOctober 31, 2013 at 8:44 AM

    beautiful expressions, Suzy.
    Life sure draws a blank sheet over us and we ask for guidance since lost.

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    1. SuzyOctober 31, 2013 at 9:53 PM

      Thanks Ruchira. Yes sometimes the way is hidden and then there's only Him we can turn to.

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  24. Ankita November 1, 2013 at 8:37 PM

    That's beautiful..simply lovely!

    :)

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    1. SuzyNovember 1, 2013 at 9:08 PM

      Thanks Ankita. Glad you liked it and thanks for visiting my blog.

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